Today there are many people who hope for things that are out of their reach. They hope and wish and have expectations so high, they are disappointed when it is not what they wanted. One can hope for something but it is not guaranteed that it will happen. In the poem "A Coney Island Life" by James L. Weil, he said one shouldn't have hopes too high because in the end, they'll just be reaching for something they can't get.
The author compares life to a Coney Island carnival. Life has good times and bad times like a "rollercoaster ups and downs". When one is hoping for something great to happen to them, they are going up the rollercoaster. But once their hopes and dreams are crushed, they are going down the rollercoaster scared and afraid. The poem also compares one's high hopes to helium balloons. When one hopes too high for something that won't happen they will be crushed and left behind. "And seen my helium hopes break skyward without me."
The author also talks about life and death. One might be living their last their last few days of their life but won't know when they'll leave earth. Every day when one wakes up, they don't know if they'll die today or tomorrow or the next. Everyday is a day to keep on reaching for one's hopes that haven't been reached. The poem also talks about reaching for one's hopes. The author compares reaching for one's hopes to catching the "brass-ring-sun before the game is up". The "brass-ring-sun" is one's hopes that they are reaching for everyday. If the hopes are too high, it will be harder to reach them. If one wants to be able to reach one's hopes, don't have hopes too high.
In conclusion, having hopes too high will only lead to disappointment. One shouldn't have hopes too high because in the end, they'll just be reaching for something they can't get. If one's hopes are in reach, they will be happy. But if one's hopes are too high and out of reach, they will be disappointed.
Rhysa, your essay has a focus but I think that you should explain the quotes more such as in the 2nd paragraph towards the end you say the quote about the helium hopes but didn't explain about the quote but you did explain the quote about rollercoasters going up and down. Also in the 2nd paragraph I don't know if it was a typo or not but you repeated their last their last twice. Overall your essay is expressive on what the author is trying to say but needs as little more reasoning and explanation. But overall good job!
ReplyDeleteThe purpose is evident through your thesis, thoughts, evidence, and reasoning. Everything is written in very deep perception to the poem with good content that is grammatically correct and structured well. Your audience is well stated to be people, and the voice can be heard in the essay. It's very well done with good explanations to your evidence and reasoning.
ReplyDeleteYOUR INTRO NEEDS TO BE MORE COMPLETE IN OPENING DISCUSSION YOU ARE ALSO MISSING SHORT SUMMARY/SYNOPSIS OF THE STORY. YOUR REASONING IN YOUR BODY SECTIONS NEED TO BE MORE THOROUGH. YOU STATE THINGS BUT DONT EXPLAIN IT ENOUGH. LASTLY THE CONCLUSION IS VERY WEAK, YOU NEED TO SUMMARIZE ALL IDEAS DISCUSSED IN BODY SECTIONS, RESTATE THESIS, AND THEN PROVIDE LASTING INSIGHT. as(2)
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